Question.3471 - This is our first peer review! Every essay will be peer reviewed, which requires two steps: uploading a complete draft of your essay and then reviewing two peers' essays using the questions below.Post a complete draft of your Mock Essay here for peer review as early in the week as possible. Remember, 750 words minimum along with a works cited with fake sources properly formatted in MLA style (I would post your draft as a PDF, word, or pages file to help maintain proper formatting as that is literally all I care about. You cannot see your peers' essays until you submit your own, so make sure to complete and upload your draft as early as possible in the week so that you can review your peers' essays.Once you upload your draft, please review the projects of TWO other students by Friday at 5:00.Respond to each of the following questions in your review. A good peer review has a couple of sentences on each question (meaning a good peer review takes about 30 minutes to conduct). Do they have a proper header, heading and title? Does their introduction have a hook, introduce your central subject, and establish a clear thesis with main points? How can the student author make their thesis more assertive and improve support of the thesis? How could the writer improve the clarity of each body paragraph's topic sentences? How well does the writer follow the intro-tag-quote-cite-explain formula? What part of the formula should they improve upon? Does the writer utilize all three types of direct quotations (short, long, and block)? Which types needs a bit of fine tuning? How well formatted is their works cited? Is there a citation or aspect of formatting (double spacing, alphabetizing, etc.) that needs to be addressed and improved? Provide the student author with specific examples of mechanical problems in the paper. What is the writer's biggest strength in the essay? What is the essay's biggest weakness and how might the writer address that weakness in revision?
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